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M-smith-doppel
prisca1960

FanFiction // Jeremiah // God says ...

Characters: Mister Smith, Rose
Rating: G
Words: 216

revised Story January 2016



Thoughtfully he looked at Rose. It had happened again, God had talked to her.

He wasn't sure what to think about this. His own experiences with God were not the best. Although the voice had become a part of him in the course of time. If He kept quiet for a while, he sometimes wondered if this was the end and he felt some kind of strange regret.

For sure God was rather demanding than giving. Often enough he put him through hell. To know what would happen and forced to watch helplessly. Or, to save some people by killing others. Always following his mysterious orders without knowing the reason for it. No, it was not easy to be God's puppet. It meant a lot of pain, a lot of grief and a lot of loneliness.

The thought that his little daughter had to go through the same tormented him. He would have done to save her from him, but he knew, this didn't lie in his power.

"Daddy?!"

He startled when her soft voice tore him out of his thoughts. She looked at him with her gentle smile which almost broke his heart. He loved her. He loved her so much.

Her small hand grabbed for his.
"Don´t be afraid. He will never hurt me."

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Oh, poor Smith. How he must fear for his Rose. And she's so certain and serene, with all a child's acceptance.

Well done, Prisca

Oh yes, I think he fear so much for Rose. And I´m not sure, if he believes her ... but I do ;-)

Rose is so certain of her safety. I hope God continues to keep her that way, and that He spreads some of that safety to Mister Smith too.

Lovely!

Yes, this would be nice - God could really spread a little bit of this safety to Smith!

How hard this must be for Smith. Yet Rose may be right and God's plans for her won't be as painful as Smith's. *hopes*

In my mind it's very likely that Rose' destiny will be another than Smiths. But I fear, Smith will never trust God so much that he will not fear for Rose!

God speaking to Rose has the potential to create interesting reactions in Mister Smith. I like what you did here. Every parent fears for their children.

Thank you!
Yes, every parent can understand Smith! And his situation is so much more difficult then ours!

"No, it was not easy to be God's puppet. It was a lot of pain, a lot of grief and a lot of loneliness!"

It must be very hard for Smith.
Very well done, sweetie! Thank you.

Thanks!
I must be hard for everyone to live at this time! But especially for him: to know so much and nobody to talk about!Only to be a nut in the others mind! Without past, without future! ... But he has Rose! No wonder, that he fears for her!

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